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 Posted: Sat Apr 07, 2012 9:04 pm Post subject: Opinion on this ribcage/chest piece |
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shoot me down if need be,got this side piece not finished round script yet needs filler or maybe feathers dont know , thoughts?
Shot at 2012-04-05
then added this writein today but a dont know if its me lookin into it to much but was having the writein over the dove the right idea? or not? or does it tie in cool? maybe just being paranoid but i need some more opinions from artists ,the writeings black and the swirls are grey it maybe look all sweet when its all healed dove was only done last week and had a little goin over the outline today,a gonna get all me chest done eventually any ideas what would work well?also like the way it looks like the birds flying kinda inbeetween the script if u get me? but just need an honest opinion ive pickled me head for hours maybe just lookin to much into it .
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| Posted: Sat Apr 07, 2012 11:01 pm Post subject: |
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I don't understand the last pic in your thread. Maybe I missed why you put that in there...
In any event, not a big fan of the whole piece. Just way overdone and unoriginal. IMO of course and just being brutally honest.
BUT, the work is well done and it looks good for what it is.
I agree that the script ovet the bird's wing was not a great idea. Looks a bit jumbled and jarring. Having said that, it will probably look a bit better when healed and not a huge deal all things considered so I wouldn't sweat it. |
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| Posted: Sat Apr 07, 2012 11:20 pm Post subject: |
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| yeah av scrapped that last pic ignore that... and thanks for your reply mate appreciate it i no its hardly original but it is what it is i suppose , any idea for what to put round the script some light filler maybe nothing to much? and yeah i get the same with the writing on the dove its just not easy on the eye atall hopefully when it heals it will be alot more clear. any idea where to go or just write a line under it and move onto me next piece? |
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| Posted: Sat Apr 07, 2012 11:35 pm Post subject: |
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| The works looks solid, but where's the apostrophe in "It's"? |
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| Posted: Sat Apr 07, 2012 11:41 pm Post subject: |
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| good shout captain can be put in cant believe i never picked up on that and i went over it a few times sometimes you look to hard,baring that what about the other things like the writing over the dove etc |
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It is poorly planned and not super exciting but it is clean work. You are missing two apostrophes. "Its" is a possessive pronoun; "it's" is a contraction of "it is."
Oh, my mistake, someone already mentioned that. The script going over the dove sucks, hence "poorly planned." But it could be much much worse. It is pretty nice work overall. I wouldn't stress over it but instead focus on your next tattoos  |
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| Posted: Sun Apr 08, 2012 6:52 am Post subject: |
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| reckon look better once its healed and can owt be done to make the script better over the dove?an like its not been just chucked there cause no room just summert tie it in |
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Aside from maybe adding the apostrophes, I would not screw with it. I don't think there is much you can do with the script over the wing aside from making all the script more bold OR making the bird darker except for that part of the wing. You could also hit the area of the wing around the script with a laser to lighten it. Any of these options however might just fuck everything up.
Again, it is a solid piece and your artist did a good job. I would be happy with it for what it is and move on.
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| Posted: Sun Apr 08, 2012 8:34 am Post subject: |
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| I would lay off the script. You've got enough for a life time. I don't get why you put the script right through the bird's wings?? |
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| cheers for the input dudes,appreciated! and i did question the writein would look good and he said having the write in over the wing was kinda hes idea from the start so am unsure on that meself as i did ask to leave enough room as i wanted script,maybe it will look better when its healed,if not then i think just makin it more bold be the only option bar the wing and the writeing in the wing more bold and just live with it,well i have to really lol im happy with the work done tho for what it is hes done some pretty clean work and all the lines are good to measure so thats all good could be alot worse but bit more plannin could of worked out well, ahh well be sure to plan future pieces with abit more precision lesson learned also got an idea for a back piece really love some input on it i think could email one of you guys maybe seem cool over hear always good having a second opinion. |
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I like the writing over the bird, it does look intentional.
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| Posted: Sun Apr 08, 2012 3:40 pm Post subject: |
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| it his that was hes idea but couple people put doubt in my mind and now am unsure think it ties it in but on the other hand u can glance at it and think it aint meant be there but i think it maybe all cool when it heals and stand out more hmmm |
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| im not unhappy with the work by the way really happy with the standard of ink , and was me that give the go ahead go over after he put the idea across i just doubtin it now when its to late so was after outside opinion as asking ppl i no just say ye its cool which is why a asked on hear for unbiased opinion |
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you talk like a rasta.........
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